The snow under my shoes is super thick. It's kind of hard to walk but it was fine. The view is amazing.
I could see huge mountains and lumps of ice. The ice is really slippery. I need to watch out so I don't fall over.
I can hear and feel the icy cold wind. It’s so cold out here that my cheeks looked like they were slapped red. The sky is a beautiful blue colour today.
Hello Chasity, This is your classmate, I like your writing
ReplyDeleteIt's amazing!
The story actually matches the picture
and I like how you add this to your writing
"The sky is a beautiful blue colour today". Keep up the good work :)
Kia ora Chastity, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I love your simile about your cheeks being red. I wonder if there are any sound effects (onomatopoeia) that you could add to your writing?
ReplyDeleteKia Ora chastity your story is very good you should add more writing and more descriptive writing and it would be a perfect story.
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